#204 Blog
Post Wednesday 25 September 2024
http://dennyhatch.blogspot.com/2024/09/204-first-100-words.html
Posted by Denny Hatch
"Your
First 100 Words Are More Important
Than
the Next Ten Thousand."
—Elmer "Sizzle" Wheeler
Above is
the lede of a “dry test” 8-page direct mail letter that was sent in 1978. It offered a one-year subscription to a newsletter — International
Living. The newsletter did not exist.
It was the brainstorm of fledgling marketing genius, Bill Bonner — a rail-thin, six-foot-two 30-year-old advertising copywriter — right after he underwent three catastrophic failures that left him $70,000 in debt.
Bonner sent this "dry test" letter to a rented list of several thousand homeowners to see if anyone would read it and respond. His letter — entirely fiction — was 300% profitable on day one of returns. Wow!
Bill
immediately borrowed start-up capital, published the newsletter, and mailed
that very letter for the next 23 years.
Today Bill Bonner’s wee newsletter business — 44 years later — is called The Agora (theagora.com). It’s a mighty conglomerate of 36 global entrepreneurial companies in 15 countries around the world with revenues of over $1 billion a year!
down the road from David Ogilvy's Chateau de Toffou.
The Power of Those First 100 Words.
Take a moment to go back and look at wizardry of Bill Bonner’s first hundred words. They paint a picture of you — “Dear Reader” — waking up in a lush lifestyle enjoyed only by the very, very rich.
• In those first 100 words, “you” or “your” is used seven times.
• Your maid is bringing you your breakfast in bed while out your window overlooking the ocean your gardener is busy pruning your lemon, cherry and fig trees and amid the splendor of your gardenias, hibiscus and hollyhocks.
• And what's more, you can easily afford it, Bonner promises.
• Bill's letter is all about YOU, the reader. Absolutely nothing about Bill.
• Nowhere to be found: the words “I,” “me,” “my,” “we” or “our.”
I invite
you to download (free) Bill Bonner's legendary letter for
your swipe file. Not only is it the 8-page document that launched his $1 billion a year corporate empire, it's fascinating to read!
What's more, it could
change how you communicate with strangers. And maybe even change your life and
how you do business!
https://drive.google.com/file/d/16S8lGX0_1DaVg3jbO0EcpfgPrgxFj2Lb/view?usp=sharing
Takeaways to Consider:
Seven Proven Tips for Writers.
•
“Short words! Short sentences!” Short paragraphs!”
—Andrew J. Byrne
•
“Tests have shown that a sentence of eight words is very easy to read; of 11
words, easy; of 14 words, fairly easy; of 17 words, standard; of 21 words,
fairly difficult; of 25 words, difficult; of 29 or more words, very difficult;
so this sentence with 54 words, counting numbers, is ranked impossible.”
—Virginia-Pilot
•
The 7 Key Copy Drivers — emotional hot buttons that make people act:
Fear – Greed – Guilt – Anger –
Exclusivity – Salvation – Flattery
—Axel Andersson. Bob Hacker
•
“If your copy isn’t dripping with one or more of these copy drivers, tear it up
and start over.”
—Bob Hacker
•
The 13 most powerful and evocative words in the English language are:
You - Save - Money
- Guarantee - Love – Results -
Proven
–
Safety - Easy – New - Health -
Discovery – Free
—Goodman Ace
• "Avoid gray walls of type."
—David Ogilvy
•
“Type smaller than 9-point is difficult for most people to read.”
—David Ogilvy
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